In the article "Dora
Learns to Write and in the Process Encounters Punctuation" by Pat Cordeiro
Dora’s teacher did a lot of things correctly when teaching her how to properly
punctuate sentences. For example after writing stories the teacher would have
Dora read HERS (possessive pronoun) out loud to the class. Then, with Dora she
compared her writing to that in a book and asking if she noticed the difference
between the two. This helped show Dora that in writing the letters do not flow
together they are spaced out. In order to farther her point the teacher and
Dora used their hands to frame the words in Dora’s story so she could see there
the spaces should go.
In addition the
teacher explained to Dora that she needed to read in sentences and periods go
at the end of them. However even though the teacher did a good job explaining
that dots are periods and Dora started thinking of them this way her
explanation could have been a lot better. This is because she failed to ever
explain exactly what a sentence is. After her very brief explanation the kids
got into their groups to discuss their writing. After looking at THEIRS (possessive
pronoun) Dora and the others figured out that periods must not go at the end of
every word, but they had no idea where else to put them due to their lack of
understanding of the nature of a sentence. In order to help correct this
however the teacher read Dora’s story back to her with the incorrect
punctuation and by pausing everywhere Dora put a period the teacher was able to
convey the choppy nature of the story Dora created and help her understand that
she was not creating sentences, merely fragments with a period at the end. In
addition the teacher showed Dora a book to demonstrate that there are not
periods at the end of each line because the end of a line does not signify the
end of a sentence. However this entire time the teacher is still not telling
Dora what a sentence actually is. So even though Dora understands the examples
she is presented with when it comes time to punctuate her writing she is at a
loss. Some could see that the teacher never telling Dora WHOSE (possessive pronoun)
way of punctuating is better it helped Dora learn how to figure out things for
herself and grow as a writer.
To farther Dora’s
confusion when she is still punctuating at the end of every line her teacher
does not say anything about it and Dora interoperates this silence as her
writing is correct and keeps up this method of punctuation. Then the teacher
furthers her confusion by giving instructions that Dora views as contradictory.
She tells her to “stop at all the periods” and to read it in sentences. Because
the teacher was never clear with Dora what a sentence is she is unsure how to
read her story in a way that fit into both of the categories that the teacher
described. So she ended up reading it how it is supposed to sound and ignoring
the periods. After hearing Dora reading it this way the teacher assumed that
she was punctuation the sentences correctly when in fact the written version
did not match up with Dora read aloud.
Miscommunication
like this and Dora’s general confusion on the nature of a sentence is what
caused Dora to take such a long time to learn how to properly punctuate. If the
lessons had been clearer and the teacher had asked Dora more questions to
clarify her understanding the entire process would have been much shorter.
Your first possessive noun worked well and sounded smooth. However the second one using theirs technically worked but from the sentence I don't feel like we really know what "theirs" is referring to. Also the third one was used correctly the sentence just doesn't flow smoothly. So instead of saying "the teacher never telling Dora whose way of punctuating" you could say "the teacher never told Dora whose way of punctuating" if that makes sense. But good job!
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