Tuesday, October 22, 2013

Blog 9

I am honestly not sure what to write about for this blog. In the past I have been going back to previous writing, however now that we have so many patters I have been having trouble shoving them into essays that I have already written. So I’m trying something different. (Long sentence then a short sentence) Is there even a point in forcing you to read a boring essay I wrote last year for a class I probably hated? (Real question) So instead of that I decided to a write stream of consciousness this week. Honestly I should be asleep right now- but I have a lot to do tomorrow. (Dash to emphasize the last element of a sentence) Because of this I really feel like I should finish my blog tonight so it is not late. In the morning I have to go grocery shopping and then meet people to work on a group project and my logic homework is due later in the day. (Simple sentence with compounded verbs connected with ands AND use of “then”)

However I do not want to do any of this. (Use "however" in a correctly punctuated sentence AND a one-sentence paragraph)

Finishing the book I am currently reading sounds much better than my responsibilities. (Use of “than”) So why do I have to do anything tomorrow? (Rhetorical question) 

Tuesday, October 1, 2013

Blog 7

Aside from a few months in middle school when I decided that I was going to write everything, poems, novels, short stories etc. (which you can image did not pan out very well) all the writing I have done has been academic writing for classes. Thorough out the years I have noticed that most of my teachers have had the same comments upon returning my edited papers; I do not use enough commas. Nor do I use the active voice. (start a sentence with "Nor")
I have been fully aware of my comma underuse for years, yet for some reason I have neglected to do anything about it. I continued to write sentences, pause to look over them, realize that my comma use had to be far to infrequent, and then instead of fixing them I just moved on. Because it was easier to do than actually bother to look up where to properly place them. (start a sentence with a "Because" clause) Looking back over the English classes that I have taken through my life I am slightly shocked to realize that I do not remember being instructed on commas since 6th grade. Not that I can use this as an excuse for my resistance to taking the time out of my day to find the answers that my education was not providing, however I feel that there are a lot of misconceptions regarding commas and more English teachers should take time to address them. Then maybe I would not find sentences in my writing such as:

While Lovelace praises the action of fighting Owen condemns it because unlike Lovelace he had actually seen combat. (end a sentence with a "because" clause) He realizes that regardless of hundreds of years of literature glorifying the actions of soldiers, there is nothing pleasant about war”.

Looking back on this is realize that it is a run on sentence without commas; yet this is a final draft. (a compound sentence using a semicolon) For this reason I plan on making sure that I use the proper number of them when I am writing in the future. This way my academic papers in the future will be more grammatically correct and clear and professional.


My relationship with the passive voice is significantly more complicated then commas. I can trace it back to my Junior year of high school, when, despite years of English classes this is the first time I had even heard the term. I remember a teacher actually explaining what the passive voice was and why we should avoid it when writing; The only problem was I had absolutely no idea what she was talking about. (a compound sentence using a semicolon) I got that the active voice was what I should be using in essays, and based on several papers I received graded from that same teacher I knew I was using the passive voice. And when she pointed it out in my writing I could recognize it, though I could not stop myself from using it once or twice in every paper. (though, to interrupt a main sentence as a kind of aside) Now when proofreading my own papers I can generally catch myself and change my sentences to the active voice. Yet it is still a struggle for me to recognize what I am using as I am writing. This year and I want to become better at identifying the difference between the two and I can stop myself and change my sentence structure before I write it down the first time. This way I will be avoiding turning in papers with sentences such as “The action of fighting is praised by Lovelace…”. By taking more care the omit the passive voice from my writing it will be come a lot more straightforward.